Friday evening.
It was Dripping to the ground.
The rhythm of the rain drops soothing for the ear drums.
Drumming the roof tops.Dropping all around.
It Drowned Anitha, as she was heading to the parking lot from office exit door.
Entered home took her towel(pink one), stood in the balcony looking out the Sweet rain.
Thick and drenching the leaves.
Hissing.
It rattled as it fell on the tin remains.
Looked at the sky,was it blue-black no no it was grey.Water flowed everywhere and formed puddles.Mild cold breeze mixed with water drops.
She rushed in to the kitchen and started to prepare Tea.
Shyam knocked the door.
Anitha "Shyam va da.I am in kitchen".
He was also drenched fully.Went to kitchen.
Anitha said without turning back "Climate is beautifull illa da"
He looked her from back.She was wearing a blue plain saree.Little drenched.
He spoted the water dropplets on her smooth back.
One of them started to flow down slowly.And immediately the other and one by one.
She turned suddenly."enna man pakra"
He said "enna panra".
"Tea da.come come lets go to balcony"
She was looking gorgoeus in the saree.Her hip was waxed with rain water.
Hair was wet and unfolded on to her forehead.Lips were inviting.
Shyam twirled down.
They sat in the balcony.Hissing and pattering.Rain water was spattering on them.
She raised the hot cup to her sweet lips.Steam egressed to her face.
He watched.
Anitha "Enn da.What happened.Are u alright"
Her voice and dialogues were teasing.
He said "Anitha !!".
She had a sip and said "Sollu da.Why are u looking at me idiot.
Look outisde.The rain.How beautiful it is.Wow.Hey see there that little lamb.Pavam"
Silence.
Then she placed the cup and came near him.
Took her saree end and started to chafe, said "your hair is fully wet"
Shyam looked at her hips and he can no longer hold his desire, placed his right hand palm on the soft bosomy skin.
She looked down and said "Dai..".But warm she felt.
He raised from the chair, kissed her lips hard pressing her hips.More warm or rather hot it turned out to be for her.
Carried her inside.
It(Rain) thickened.With thuders and ligthing.
It was crashing.
It lasted for another 30 mins.
It started to drizzle and slowly a beautiful rainbow got painted in the sky.
Final drops from the leaves and construction ends found their destinations.
Anitha was lying on his chest.Smiled to herself.
Shyam never knew that Anitha was all set for it when the first drops of rain fell on her at the office exit.But he learnt this on its due course.When it was intesified and at its peak.
A female desire will always be hidden with patience/control and at the end will be executed to perfection.
24 comments:
hmm...I am not sure what to comment on this, coz konjam expected results madhiridhan iruku..the only thing you have missed out is if they were married or it was a sudden lust between two friends. But onne onnu puriyala, the previous story atleast spoke about unconquerable fate, but what does this talk about? That yarkavadhu thideernu "aasai" vanta, amaidhiya konjam wait panna thane niraiveridum?
hey, ok, konjam yosanai-kappuram I think I have a wrong perspective :) All stories need not have a moral attached to it..and you have done well in narrating an incident, so hats off!
once i got drenched in the rain
that is last November, 2005
and as u said here
i was in a blue...ie. copper sulfate blue plain saree
i came home and wrote this
"The damp air cuddles my body to burning pinions of passion…
My wet body runs desires high…. kindling intoxication …
Feelings scale beyond the wildest dreams…."
and yeah...it is true...
hmm..idhukku nan enna comment vidarathu n theriyala...highly romantic and very nicely written...
last line pathi ennakku ethuvum theriyathu:P..lol..
You seem to know the female mind well! A well written story which ignites passion in the heart while reading......
Soooo Romantic da !
"A female desire will always be hidden with patience/control and at the end will be executed to perfection"
Well said my man!
Hmmm...goodone!
BTW, u;ve just been tagged by me:)
great one daa logic machaan.. the way u tell small little details makes it all the more impressive... keep it up..
Usha:
Yes Usha as u said all stories need not have moral.But something should be in there(a thought provoking)..whenever i write something here i want it to go in deep to atleast 1 out of 3 readers.
Thanks for your comments.
Veda:
Nanri.hope u liked it.
Sophia:
"copper sulfate blue plain saree"
Thats sweet..i shud have used this.
"Feelings scale beyond the wildest dreams"
This is Neat
Mystery:
Was expecting lot of comments from you..
Kirukal:
"Ignites" : -
OMG the best word to descripbe it.I lost this while composing.
Raz:
Thansk for the WWWOOOOOOOOWWWWW.
Dakaltiz:
Good to c u back da..hope you recover soon dear.
Has to be me:
Thanks for your commetns.
Aiyyo taga..home worka..pls pls..no no.
ramesh:
thanks da...California laa irunthu commen vitrukan ...roomba perumaiya irukey da..
sorry da..work porra avasrathla edho kirikitten polla irrukku...
every time i open ur page to see if u have added any new post..i settle down to read this story again...kootti kalichi partha..oru 5-6 times padichi irrupen...
as i said before...very very romantic...goes perfectly with the climate..
each and every line is beautifully painted carrying a passionate and intimate feeling..
expecting more like this from u pa..:)))))
paathi padikum pothe... vaseegara paatu oda arambichidichu :) ... very good one...
Kadavuley!!! chi chi chi chi chi chi chi...
but if you ask Raz she won't agree ;)
which of the two are you? :O
ok, slightly cinematic. but why the hell should girls hide the passion???
Good one, especially the last sentence.:))
@Mystery:
Thanks thats lika good girl.
@nandoo:
Vasegara apt song..kalkitinga..
@swas:
Rousu Raz thane..
None of the two is me.
@shree:
"Slightly romantic"
Unga levela thani than madam..
@ammu and Madhoo:
Thanks a lot.
OYE..olunga padi.. slightly romanticna yeludhi irukken?? slightly cinematicnu yeludhi irukken.
Yep... women always hide their feeings....
Aanai vida pennukke unarchigal adigam...
Hi,
My name is Aswin. I bumped into your blog after following a couple of links from my friend's blog.
This write up was really a nice one.
Have you ever read "When the stars shine down" by Sidney Sheldon? There is a similar write up about the passionate moment you have written ( it was written in terms of 'rain' and 'grasses' etc. Try reading it if you can. Its good)
But I liked your post.
The last statement ".... executed to perfection".... It was just great. I just gave you a round of applause.
Wishes from Germany,
Aswin
"A female desire will always be hidden with patience" /control and at the end will be executed to perfection."
word in bold. everyone should agree with that and to add more I have experience the patience and control that they have.
@shree:
sorry slight mistake manichiko..
@vishy;
you are right machi
@aswin:
Thanx boss...yes i had read Sidney Sheldon..its good..
if you get a chance do see the movie "The Scarlet Letter"
@Neigh:
Welcome back nanba..missed u r commetns all these days..howz u r fiancee.
hey pa..didnt get google talk invitation from you..u have yahoo..msn??..
I liked the last line... :)
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